I wrote this for ELA cl im 8th grade. about the time from childhood to adolescence. What do you think?help?

Your spelling and punctuation need work. In one place you meant think but wrote thing. You change the way you look,the way you dress,etc. should be one sentence listing with commas, The way you dress. is not a sentence it is a sentence fragment. You forgot the t on the word tell and wrote she doesn't ell. You get one thin and want another should be you get one "thing"...look over your spelling very carefully. Also add apostrophe marks to contractions like the word can't. I hope you find my criticism helpful and constructive , I don't want you to be discouraged because you are a good logical writer in general.